Need your opinion on a design

For fun, I'm (slowly) creating informational pamphlets about the early silver commemoratives, and would like opinions on which Bay Bridge pamphlet you prefer.


STYLE #1 -





STYLE #2 -

 

Log in or Sign up to hide this ad.

Style #2 makes it look much better. Like the map on it.
Style #1 is to of a modern style.

 

Both are very nice but I prefer #2 as it's balanced. I like the coins side by side versus style 1. If you could get style 2 side you side I'd take that first. I like the blue water and the detail of the bridge.

 

I prefer #2 ....however a nice photo of the bridge be nice also.... perhaps vintage 1936...just a thought....

 

I also like #2 better. Nice.

 

You have the designer's name spelled two different ways. One is "Jacque" and the other "Jacques".

 

I like the presentation of the #1, even though it can't fit as much info.

 

Same for me. Presentation of #1 is appealing to my eye. Just doesn’t leave room for the additional info.

 

I like style 1 more, but both are nice (I agree with an earlier comment that the map looks cool on #2).

Note: #1 has a small typo: "anumal" should be "animal"

 

#1 is far better in my opinion, but I’d change the font of the title to give it a more classic look as a Paddy suggested

 

#2 presents much more information, looks more professional and would make me feel like I was getting more for my money.
Reed and Sparkles the Unicorn.

 

Blocks of text should be avoided. Limit any text in an infograph like this to a simple sentence or two, at most.

With a thing like this, why not use an actual picture instead of this line drawing? Faded to a certain degree as a background, it would be a much better backdrop than whatever simplified engineers drawings you're using (get rid of the suspension towers... nobody cares).

I like the idea of multicolored font, but it needs to be done with a purpose. I think if you had an actual photograph of the bridge, you can match the text color to the picture.

I like the idea of a map on the pamphlet, but you don't need 25 points identified.... some sort of simplified version of that would be better.

And why the heck is there some random bear on the coin? We can all understand the importance of the bridge, but is the bear some sort of special symbol to somebody involved with this coin? I'm pretty sure there's no bears in San Fran, unless they're in a zoo.

If I were to vote for strictly one of the options presented, I'd pick #2. More interesting layout, better information, better pictures. It's just too busy.

Overall, its an interesting idea and a decent start, but there are areas to make it better.

 

Thanks for all the feedback. Typo's have been corrected (thanks @TheFinn & @ddddd ).

Running a pretty close race so far.

Style #1 is consistent with others that I have done. Style #2 I thought was really cool looking. That's why I put the 2 styles up, as it doesn't really 'fit' the others, but I like the look and feel of it.

@physics-fan3.14 , the Grizzly bear is California's official state animal, and that's why it's there, although I think the bear should have been on the reverse. The bear is also used on the California Jubilee commemorative. Californians love their bear I guess!

A couple of you have suggested using an actual photo of the bridge. I have used some paintings in some of the others, but actual photos would not be conducive to the entire set I'm working on. Many of the commems are about cities and/or states, and for those, line drawings are better, and much easier to work with. So I'm trying to use a minimum of non-line art pieces.

My target audience is the YN crowd. Commemoratives (old and modern) have, IMO, much more to hold an attention span then 109 years of looking at the same portrait, with an occasional new reverse image.

I do have plans to do the full set in these 'pamphlets', and if my plan works out, they'll be double-sided tri-folds.

Here's a couple more so you can see the 'feel' of the set:

 

#2 for me. Really cool and alot if info in my opinion on it.

 

Cool project. The engineer in me likes #2.

 

That is pretty neat.
I like both. If it were me I would choose layout #2.

 

Definitely #1. The more information heavy #2 will play better with the older crowd but with the young crowd eye appeal will play the best. Something catchy that draws you in like the bridge being pictured that's actually on the coin. Aesthetically pleasing will do more to draw them in where in these cases less is probably more when it comes to the info.